If I wrote you a letter & told you that I live in a house where the exterior is painted green, do you think you could envision the correct shade of green without any further information? Since there are tons of shades of that color, it would be kind of hard to get it right. Remember that your goal, as a writer, is to leave nothing to your reader's imagination. So your descriptions should not be as vague as just saying "green." One person could picture a bright, lime green house! Another person might think of a deep, rich, emerald green color. And still another reader could imagine a dark hunter green.
I'd like you to practice making color descriptions a bit better. Look at the sentences below. Pick one and improve it so that the exact shade you're imagining is conveyed clearly to the reader.
1.) Susan's gray cat slept on the chair.
2.) The cashier had gorgeous red hair.
3.) Maria marveled at the blue sky over the ocean.
4.) Home Depot is selling brown patio furniture.
5.) His daughter twirled in her favorite pink dress.
12 comments:
3.) Maria marveled at the soft, pale, light blue sky over the ocean.
-Jolene H
4.) Home Depot is selling brown patio furniture.
Home Depot is selling dark, chocolate brown patio furniture.
Rebekah W.
2.) The cashier had gorgeous red hair.
The cashier had gorgeous cascading burgandy hair.
Luz Croce
His daughter tuirled in her favorite dress color, soft like a rosee flower pink.
2) The cashier had gorgeous red hair.
The cashier had gorgeous rich garnet red hair.
Geraldine G.
5.) His daughter twirled in her favorite pink dress.
His daughter twirled in her favorite bright hot pink dress.
Susan's grey cat slept on the chair.
Susan's soft, dusty grey cat slept on the chair.
His daughter twirled in her favorite bright pink dress.
Maria marveled at the blue sky over the ocean.
Maria marveled at the bright, clear blue sky over the transparent green ocean.
Archarna J.
"Improving Your Descriptions"
The little girl at the playground had dirt in her long, jet black, locks of curls when she fell out of the swing.
-Angelica
2.) The cashier had gorgeous red hair.
The cashier had gorgeous natural long red hair.
Alicia.T
At home depot they are selling the most gorgeous shade of light brown patio furniture,with a nice glossy finish.
Indira H.
Post a Comment