The blog post on Saturday, June 14th, talked about having a purpose when you write. Think about news articles that appear either online or in print. If it's a true news story about something that happened, the story should focus on the facts and have little (if any) opinion or "slant" thrown in.
Here's an example of a fictional news story that's free from opinion.
Today, at 11:58am on I-95, a red 1999 Ferrari driven by Brad Pitt was involved in an accident with a city-owned garbage truck. The Ferrari sustained front-end damage and the driver refused medical treatment. The Fort Lauderdale fire and police departments responded and remained on the scene until approximately 1pm.
Now, take a look at that same story, but written with more opinion included.
Today, at 11:58am on a not-so-crowded I-95, a gorgeous red 1999 Ferrari driven by the incredible actor Brad Pitt was involved in a minor accident with a dirty, smelly, city-owned garbage truck. The rare, expensive Ferrari sustained front-end damage and the good looking driver refused necessary medical treatment. The large Fort Lauderdale fire and police departments responded quickly and remained quietly on the scene until approximately 1pm.
What parts in the second story identify it as more opinion-laden than the first story? Give me one example that jumped out at you.
Next, I want you to write a few sentences (3-5) that are opinion-free and describe an event. It could be real (such as today's weather) or fictional. But remember, you want to give the facts and just the facts. :)
9 comments:
Today, in south Florida the temprature has been around 100 degrees. The heat has caused many forest fires in the everglades. Caution is advised if as you make your way through the everglades on I 75 due to heavy smoke.
Rebekah W.
mirlene- Opinion
In a minor accident with a dirty, smelly, city-owned garbage truck.
June suppose to be hot but, I feel that there is a change in the weather like it seem cool today.
In June 1998, a pretty girl was born, the nurse said, she was a smart person.
Incredible actor Brad Pitt.
On August 2nd 1990 we received news of a plane crash. The crash happened just off the island of Guam. The plane was carrying 140 passengers and crew. All are presumed dead.
Writing-What's your purpose?
Opinion
Today in one of south Florida high schools a group of seven pregnant teenagers, planned to get pregnant and have their babies at the same time. Said the girls' principal but no proof upholds these alligations.
-Angelica
Today we have no delays on the expressway; I-95 southbound and northbound are moving freely. Only minor traffic accidents such as bumper to bumper collision with little to no damage. All stopped vehicles are out of the way of oncoming traffic and the roads are clear of debris.
Archarna J.
The example of opinion in the second story that jumped out at me was "incredible actor."
Two kittens were adopted today. The adoptive family said they were very happy and excited to provide a loving home for them. The kittens are brother and sister from the same litter and have been together since birth.
Opinion -free:
Yesterday, at 6:10 a.m. the police of the Ft. Lauderdale, Broward County, arrested two suspects accused of a robbery at Los Pollitos Restaurant.
The two suspects were indentified by the manager of the restaurant, Milagros Benditos. She said, “There were three men that stole the sum of $5,000 cash from the register. One of them hit a waitress in her leg with a gun”.
One of them is still being sought. Their names have not been released. Authorities are asking anyone with information to call Crime stoppers at 954-000-000
same with opinion included:
Yesterday, at 6:10 a.m. the police of Ft. Lauderdale, Broward County, arrested two handsome suspects accused of a robbery at the beautiful and relaxing Los Pollitos restaurant.
The two suspects were identified by the manager of the restaurant, Milagros Benditos. She said very worried, “There were three men that stole the sum of $5,000 cash from the register. One of them hit a waitress in her leg with a gun”.
One of them is still missing and maybe he is spending all the money that he stole. The police need your help to catch this man and put him in jail until he get old.
Authorities are asking to anyone with substantial information to call Crime stoppers at 954-000-000.
Geraldine G.
Today at 4:35 A.M. a green Dodge Neon collided with an eighteen wheeler, causing several other collisions and backing up traffic. So far there are no fatalities, all injuries are minor save to the driver of the Neon, who was airlifted to Memorial Hospital and is listed in critical condition. The police have not yet ascertained the cause of the crash, we will up date as new information is released.
Gustav a category four Hurricane will be reaching land soon. The residents Louisiana have been well prepared for this storm. officials predicted that the casualties will be minimum due to the time spent on the preparation.
Maria Rodriguez-Trelles
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